The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage

of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years

2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the laptop possessors,
firstly
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as a
percentage
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of the
population
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in general and
then
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considering
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also
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the instruction level, between 2002 and 2010. The data clearly shows that the
amount
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number
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of
people
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who held a
computer
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constantly increased every year between 2002 and 2010. In fact, in 2002 less than 60 per cent of the
population
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owned a
computer
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. In 2004 the
percentage
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went up to 60 per cent and
then
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, it overcame
this
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value in 2006.
Furthermore
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, in 2008 the share of the
population
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who had a
computer
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was nearly 70%.
Finally
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, in 2010 the
percentage
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rejoined the value of 80 per cent.
Similarly
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, analysing the
population
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on the basis of
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education level, the proportion of
people
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holding a
computer
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rose between 2002 and 2010. Indeed, the
percentage
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of
people
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without
the
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a
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high school diploma increased by four times from 2002 to 2010,
whereas
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the
percentage
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of
people
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with
the
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a
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high school graduation went up to 70% in 2010
while
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it was only
near
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40% in 2002.
Finally
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, for
people
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with a bachelor's degree or with a postgraduate qualification, the increase
of
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in
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the
percentage
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was about 20% between 2002 and 2010.
Overall
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, the bar charts demonstrate how the number of
computer
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owners significantly increased between 2002 and 2010.
This
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conclusion is evident from both the analysis of the
population
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in general and the study of
people
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considering their instruction level.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, people, computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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