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Some said that students should study in group. Others said that it is better to study alone. Discuss both views

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Some
students
 like studying with their friends, others like studying alone. While others said that they should
study
 alone, I would argue that they should
study
 with other friends. On the one hand, some
students
 like studying alone,
this
 may help them learn independent skills.
For example
, if they stay alone to
study
, they will have a quiet space.
This
 helps them focus on their homework and they do not need anyone to help.
Therefore
, they might have a better
study
 result.
In addition
,
students
 studying alone might help them be more proactive in their lives. Because they do their homework by themself, they need to find information and solve problems
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 their subject by themself.
On the other hand
, many people think that
students
 studying in
groups
 have more benefits.
Firstly
,
students
 studying in
groups
 may help them improve teamwork skills and
this
 is very necessary to have good job opportunities in the future.
For example
, when my friend was a university student, she often studied with her small
groups
. If they had any difficult problems, they would find solutions and solve them together.
Moreover
, they helped every member
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 the group to
study
 better.
Consequently
, their group was always
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 her class. After graduation, she worked in a famous company, because she always was the best salesperson in her group and she helped her colleagues a lot , she was promoted to sales manager.
Secondly
,
students
 studying in
groups
 may solve the problems quickly.
For example
, if teachers give difficult homework, a student may need much time to find the answers.
However
, if they
study
 with other
students
, they might very quickly find not only one answer
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also
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 answers. While it is true that
students
 studying alone are good for them, I believe that studying in
groups
 is the better option.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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