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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workforce. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workforce #workers #families #stress
One of the debatable concepts of today's world is
place
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a place
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 of
work
 .A bunch of
personage
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personages
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 claim that the
work
 in
home
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the home
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 is better so it is a just argument, howbeit there are some who express disagreement with it and buttress that the
work
 in office is better. In
this
 essay , I will explicate both stances before
precentage
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percentage
 my opinion.  On one side , the crusaders of
work
in
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at
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 home express their support valid
gronds
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grounds
.
Firstly
, the simplest exposition can
be save
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 time and money . To elucidate
further
 , they don't need cars or pay
any
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for any
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 breakfast from
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restaurant
restaurants
resturant
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a resturant
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for example
 in
cofide
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confide
code
 19
much
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 people
work
 online so , they are saved 100 riyals or more .
Additional
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 point to put here
is relax
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is relaxed
is relaxing
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. To be more specific they can
work
 with
pigama
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pyjama
 in their bed.
Moreover
 , they can
work
 with their family in their hometown .So, they can
work
throug
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through
phone
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a phone
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 or Laptop
in
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apply
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house .
Readoning
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Reading
Reasoning
 from
other
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the other
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 side , partisans of
work
 in
offic
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office
 proffer plentiful reasons to show their
propectus
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prospectus
 . In the
first
 place , they can see shear the experience with them .By way of
explanation
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 they can know about deep information and do it
such
 as Reem when she
work
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works
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 in London . She
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meets
meeted
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met
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 with a huge name so she can know a huge data . To summarize the composition , the essay explicated online
work
 benefits not only
this
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but
it
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also
 shed light on office
work
 benefits . To be honest , I totally accord with online
work
 because it
have
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has
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 positive points more than
offuce
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office
worke
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work
.
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