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More and more people today are moving away from where their friends and family live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Shifting from the location where our family and friend's residence is in vogue these days. In
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 and cons of
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 trend in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 and foremost, people prefer to live independently without the interference of their elders as they do not want to follow stringent rules
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 their parents. Another good thing about living apart to close ones,
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 they care for their children's upbringing.
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, village schools are inept in making the students capable enough to face the competition.
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, if a person is planning to leave their current home may face trouble in case any mishappening happens.
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, the person may lack cultural bounding and may miss his/her family festivals. To culminate, the benefits are more these days than the negatives of living separately.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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