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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workforce. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workforce #workers #families #stress
At the moment we are facing the covid-19 pandemic in the world because of the coronavirus every country implementing a sticky lockdown. It’s caused the shut down of all the companies, schools, institutions and research centres. Nowadays many companies and research institutions allow
people
 to
work
 from
home
 but some
community
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 happily accept
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job
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 from
home
 and others’s not. If
people
 do
work
 from
home
 it will benefit for few
people
 but another reason is many
people
 is facing the problem like mental unstable, family issues, husband-wife fighting other hand some
people
 like that because they have time for family and they can
work
 extra part-
timetime
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work
 with other company earn more money. Right now many
people
 pursuing additional courses, so
others
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 activities they are learning. They love to
work
 any time
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instead
 the watching tv
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 and chill with friends
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time.
As a result
, a person feels comfortable and becomes more concentrated on his responsibilities. In conclusion,
however
 arguments above in support of each opinion, we can see there are many advantages and disadvantages of being employed from
home
 and I want to say that it must be decided by everybody which way of employment to choose.
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