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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
Life
 has many up and downs;
although
 some individuals prefer to avoid these challenges in their
life
 and stick to their ordinary
life
 some
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 the other hand, think new shifts are necessary and are
mostly
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 beneficial in the course of their
life
. From my perspective flexibility would help us to be more blest in our
life
. For some ,keeping their
comfort-zone
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 may be the best choice as they do not want their safety. They believe, that following an ordinary way of
life
 may benefit them in their work and personal
life
. Changing a job perhaps is the one challenging shifts in every human
life
 but if individuals keep would not change their workplace and conditions
eventualy
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eventually
 will be more
saticfied
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satisfied
 because of raise in their salary and knowing most of their co-workers.
Also
, constant
changes
 in personal
life
 may damage a person's family
life
.
For instance
, a husband who tends to make
changes
 in various areas like changing his job could
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 his wife because of financial issues caused by changing jobs from time to time.
Conversely
, taking risks during
life
 may lead a person to enormous successions which may never receive if they play it safe. People who are brave enough to make
changes
 in their
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life
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 are more victorious as they may take a risk of quitting a well-payed job for seeking an even better one and mostly they are successful because today employers credit braveness.
This
 method
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 opens new doors for individuals
specially
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 youth as a selection between having a monotonous way of
life
 or an active one could give them the chance of visiting new places and new people that can help them in making a better
life
 quality. All in all, In some people's opinion, spending a
life
 with the same methods and not committing any
changes
 is acceptable
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others myself included believe
changes
 are a part of our
life
 and selecting to be flexible toward
life
 has major benefits for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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