A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness, and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is to be noted that there is a change in the way a person is valued in
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society today
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when compared to the past. It now appears to be based on
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socio-economic possessions rather than
values
such
as
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, trust and kindness. I too think
this
is much similar in most societies. The primary reason why I believe that
this
is visible across the globe is because of the increasing affinity of humans towards materialism, leaving behind traditional
values
, ethics and morals. Today, every human being wants to assimilate as much as
money
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can.
This
is because of the assumption that
money
can bring almost everything in the modern world. They assume
money
can not only buy tangible products and services, but
also
elements like social dignity. The
second
reason why I support the aforementioned view is that of the general belief that life would be miserable for those who have noble qualities
such
as kindness, honour and trust. There is some truth in
this
because
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this
fast-moving world, not many appreciate these qualities, as they are busy
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their run for
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. It can be
also
seen that today’s educational system turns a blind eye
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these
values
. I admit that some governments recognize the deeds of those who are kind and trustworthy by facilitating them in public. Even
this
attempt is not appreciated by
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modern society as they try
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their attention
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the life of famous celebrities and business tycoons
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and try to adopt their
values
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invaluable qualities like
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, kindness and trust, the ultra-modern world generally
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on factors like glamour and material possessions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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