The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.
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The graph illustrates the comparison of the
energy
capacity
between 2015 and 2040.
Overall
,
energy
from fossil fuels and other renewables will be decreased from 2015 to 2040. The number of wind and solar
energy
will have risen throughout the
years
.
However
, nuclear
energy
will be levelled out. Total
energy
capacity
will increase over the
years
.
Firstly
, fossil fuel
capacity
will be dropped between 2015 and 2040 (%64, and 44 respectively).
Secondly
, other renewable
energy
will have fallen from 2015 to 2040 (%23, and 21 respectively).
Thirdly
, total
energy
capacity
will have
been
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increased throughout the
years
(6688 GW,
11678
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and 11678
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GW, respectively) Wind
energy
will have ascended over the
years
(%5 and 12, respectively).
Energy
from
the
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solar resources will have risen exactly nine-fold from 2015 to 2040 (%18 and 2, respectively).
However
, the amount of nuclear
energy
will
be
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roughly
remained
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remain
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steady between 2015 and 2040 (%6 and 5, respectively)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, capacity, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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