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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,lots of
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 are studying at different
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 because of some rules in their
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 claim that teaching lots of
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 is more efficient whereas other
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 assert that giving several
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 which are relevant to science and technology is more
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sufficient
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 who are university
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 will be discussed herewith.
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 to teach
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mental
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,some educators agree that
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 that are related to technology and science so as to improve developments
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 the future.
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 ,who are studying medicine or biology,
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have to follow technological developments day by day since new improvements can be useful
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 which are related to science and technology. To summarize,when all of
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their
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 of technological developments in the future and
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 these
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 whatever they learn .
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,I believe University
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 ought to take a variety of
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 because of both their
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mental
 health and their academic accomplishments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
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