Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,lots of
students
are studying at different
universities
and some
students
are interested in
different
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types
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of
subjects
while other
students
are focusing
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lessons
because of some rules in their
universities
.
Therefore
, some
universities
claim that teaching lots of
lessons
is more efficient whereas other
universities
assert that giving several
lessons
which are relevant to science and technology is more
sufficent
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sufficient
for
students
.
This
essay agrees that studying a variety of
subjects
is more beneficial for
students
who are university
students
.Both points of
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will be discussed herewith.
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universities
such
as Bilkent,METU or KOÇ
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to teach
different
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types
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of
lessons
in order to enhance not only their academic success but
also
their
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mental
health.Both music and physic
subjects
are being taught because of
this
logical and valuable factor for
students
.
Also
,many surveys demonstrate that if
students
learn
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of
lessons
,they can be more successful
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exposing a lot of different
type
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types
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of
lessons
.
However
,some educators agree that
students
had better take limited
subjects
that are related to technology and science so as to improve developments
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the future.
Students
,who are studying medicine or biology,
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have to follow technological developments day by day since new improvements can be useful
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their departments.It is
therefore
agreed that teachers pay attention to
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only
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subjects
which are related to science and technology. To summarize,when all of
factors
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this
topic some still assert that
students
should merely study
on
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their
subjects
because they think that it can facilitate
discovery
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the discovery
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of technological developments in the future and
also
these
students
may be overcome their
lessons
whatever they learn .
However
,I believe University
students
ought to take a variety of
lessons
because of both their
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mental
health and their academic accomplishments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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