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It is believed that women are more suited to child rearing than men. What is your opinion?

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There is no daying the fact that it is believed that ladies are more suited to
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 rearing than
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 and foremost reason behind the fact is that
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 are more able to take
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 rather than
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women
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 threw and they are more attached
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 and they will
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 like our mother and solve all the
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 stems from the fact is that ladies are behaving very nice to
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 and how time can to
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 are hungry and they will Enjoy our
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 that
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 are more able to learn better knowledge about our
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 and children
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 to share all the things
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with
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 rather than
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 are not able to take
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 better than
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. To conclude,
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 from my book of experience ladies are better
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 and they are able to
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cotton all the attention give the
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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