Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, with the development of
internet
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and computer technologies, especially in the fields of industry, many improvements
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emerged. One of the most remarkable
efects
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effects
of these is the working flexibility.
In other words
, the remote working trend spreads around the world rather than the necessity of being at an office. I am in favour that
this
situation creates more times for both companies and persons. Covid-19 outbreak changed lots of habits. The most well-known is that the brands
such
as Google,
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Facebook
and Apple, embraced the process, which
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is called
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"the new normal". Within
this
trend, people commenced
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at any
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without staying in a physical building. Thanks to these measures taken, the pandemic lost its importance.
Also
, another significant beneficial side effect of the working independence brought the
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.
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the scientific studies
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this
arena,
with
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the working from distance, humans had the opportunity of allocating more time
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their families compared to the previous one. What is more, it has been understood that there were
another
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positive effects as well. In the
brands's
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opinions,
this
meant more money savings coming from transportation and meal
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expenses
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expanses
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. On the other side, being away from and the decrease of
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interaction resulted that some mental disorders
such
as anxiety and depression had emerged. Indeed,
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today, the majority of people
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to face
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the
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psychological diseases.
As a result
of
this
situation, the level of antidepression medicines usage has peaked most recently. To recapitulate, it is a fact that there are pros and cons sides of remote working. As mentioned above, in spite of
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effects, it would be a reasonable
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to defend the remote working. From these explanations,
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advocate the distance working that positive sides overweigh more
thab
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than
that
negative ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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