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We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has
been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine.
To what extent is nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth? What are the benefits and risks associated with its use?

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In our time, the majority of
people
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 of
use
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 nuclear
technologies
 due to associations with danger
as for
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 the planet and
as for
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 themselves.
In
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I
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 totally agree that nuclear
technologies
 and
weapon
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weapons
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 are risks for Earth and will support my views with arguments and examples
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people
 used nuclear
technologies
.
First
 of all, nuclear power stations are
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 source
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 cheap power for many countries across the world.
However
, there is a huge risk of radiation liking which is dangerous for
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 and
people
. One of the examples, of
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the nuclear
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 disaster in
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the Chernobyl
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Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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 explosion more than 30 years ago
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 causes
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wave
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 of radiation to Ukraine’s neighbour countries.
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, nuclear
technologies
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 military purposes. Some countries
are already have
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 atomic bombs that can be used
in
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 any time and destroy
life
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the life
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 of innocent
people
 and our planet. Despite, all argument that some nations discuss of uses atomic bombs,
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the government
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government
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governments
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 did not
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take
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 any actions to prohibit them.
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 of using atomic bombing
is
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Hiroshima
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the Hiroshima
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 and Nagasaki disaster in the middle of
20th
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 century. As a consequence,
estimated
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 number of death is 200,000
people
 in both cities.
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other hand
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, nuclear technology can be useful for
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the treatment
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treatment
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health
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 problems including cancer, but it is the only advantage that I can see in
development
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the development
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 of nuclear
technologies
. In conclusion, nuclear development can create some benefits for society.
Nevertheless
, my view is
this
 kind of development is dangerous and it would be better if
people
 had never created
this
 type of weapon.
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