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Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruin one’s health completely. What is your opinion?

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, following a strict eating plan can improve or
deteriote
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deteriorate
 the health of the people. I opine that it is heavily reliant on the way of dieting. In
Upcoming
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 paragraphs, I will elaborate
my
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 point of
views
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. On the one hand, Dieting without
a proper knowledge
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proper knowledge
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 can be detrimental
for
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to
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 the health because
body
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the body
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 requires several
nutritions
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nutrients
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 necessarily to survive.
For example
, Some people reduce eating and drinking to lose
body
 fat
thus
result
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resulting
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 in
lacks
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 of mandatory
nutritional
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nutrition
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 in the
body
 which
cause
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myraid
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myriad
myriads
 of health problems
such
 as dizziness, tiredness, insomnia, etc.
Therefore
, one should consult a doctor or a physician to get prepared a diet plan as per their needs.
On the other hand
, particular meal plans developed by understanding
science
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 behind
it
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them
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 have positive effects on
a
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the
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body
. To elaborate, every food
items
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item
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 has
different
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a different
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 nutritional value
therefore
 it is very crucial to know which nutrients are required and which are not?
For example
, the person following dieting for building
muscular
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a muscular
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body
 requires protein and fibres in a large amount whereas the person
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who want
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want
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wants
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 to lose fat needs to avoid food enriched with
cholestrol
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cholesterol
, fatty oil, and sugar.
Hence
, Understanding
body
 demands in
proper
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the proper
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 way can change one's life positively. To
recaptitulate
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recapitulate
,
deiting
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dieting
editing
 can be
deterimental
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detrimental
 or beneficial for the people depending on its knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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