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Some people feels that entertainer such as film stars, pop musicians or sports starts are paid too much money. 1. Do you agree or disagree. 2.Which other types of jobs should be highly paid.

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Charts depict the information about
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 was utilized
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worldwide
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world wide
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 and in some selected countries in the year 2000. Overall, it is clear from the pie
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 that it depicts an average use of
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nationwide
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nation wide
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 and the bar
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 shows us the
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 in some countries in specific sectors. A glance at the pie
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 reveals that agriculture is the area where a higher quantity of
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 has been used in the year 2000 which was 70%.
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, industries used up only 22%,
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 least
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 of
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 was recorded for domestic purposes. Observing the horizontal bar
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, it can be clearly noticed that India had more agricultural activities as compared to the other three countries, as the highest agricultural
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 92% and the least as 8% in Canada.
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 Canada registered its highest
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 for industries as 80%. Whereas, New Zealand almost supplied
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 equally for the areas of agriculture and domestic with 44% and 46% respectively. China used up more
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 in its agriculture, followed by industry with 22% and domestic
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 consumed the tiniest fraction.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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