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The most important factor in job satisfaction is salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #job #satisfaction #salary
Nowadays everybody on the Earth
need
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 to have a
job
. It can be a
job
 at the office or
an
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 self-employed man. If you want to use all pleasures of the current civilization
such
 as various devices, cars, vacations and many
other
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others
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 you need to have a
job
 with an excellent salary. I agree with
this
 statement partly. Let us start by considering the facts.
To begin
 with, everybody tries to find a place where they could earn more money.
Quality
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 of your only life highly depends on
an
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the
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 amount of cash,
which
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apply
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you have.
For example
, people with
a
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apply
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paid insurance get
a
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apply
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medical care better than
at
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a
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hospital
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the hospital
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 for free. It means you can visit any specialist without long waiting or do all examinations much faster. Money is a guarantee of the best life.
Nevertheless
, one should accept that there is not only
salary`s
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salary
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 size for work satisfaction. Experts point out that, people who
does
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do
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 not like their profession
to
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apply
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have a tendency to
burnout
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burn out
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. It`s a serious issue in the modern world.
Besides
, the significant part of every working place is a local society,
for
instance
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 man, who really is fond of what is he doing might not get full delight from the process and somebody with a usual
job
 and the amazing collective would be happy. To draw
the
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a
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 conclusion, one can say that pay is
quite
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quite an
a quite
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 important part
during
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of
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 finding
profession
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a profession
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,
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apply
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 but is not the only
one
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apply
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factor. There
are
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is
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 a possibility of
career
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a career
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, relationship inside the team,
an
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and an
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 absence of monotonous processes. of the ideal
working
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,working
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 position differ for every human being Parts.
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