Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Studying at the

university

is a new format in education different from mandatory education in primary and secondary school. Some

people

think all

university

students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,

such

as those related to science and technology. In the following paragraph, I will discuss two different aspects and explain my opinion. On the one hand,

People

think a

university

must learn

for

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doing

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pursue

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a career. studying in

university

as a road to go to work.

Firstly

, they

maybe

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may

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think

study in

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studying

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basic content has already been allocated in school.

Secondly

, they

maybe

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may

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think studying in student interested subject nearly a hobby

such

as playing a musical instrument or learning communication skills should

practice

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be practised

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outside the

university

. So,

University

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the University

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must teach only useful subjects.

On the other hand

People

think a

university

is a time to improve all skills that students expect and want to improve in

this

skill

Firstly

University

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the University

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has a lot of expert personnel who can teach students in all logic studies.

Secondly

spending

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spend

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a lot of money when learning outside so why not learn under the

free of charge

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free-of-charge

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policy that was supported by the government

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Thirdly

, learning in

university

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a university

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with

people

of near ages has

pressure

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a pressure

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less than other outside private institutions. In my opinion, I tend to agree with the opinion in the third paragraph because we can learn

for

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doing a career

together with

improving another

skill

. In working time, We must have another

skill

more than logic from the subject.

For example

, a Lawyer cannot have only law knowledge but

also

should have communication

skill

and negotiation skills

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

284 words

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Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

Food travels thousands of miles from farmers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for our environment and economy if people consumed locally produced foods. To what extent do the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, mainly tourists, but not local people, visit museums and historical sites. Why does this happen? What can be done to attract more local people to visit places?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answeers and include relevant examples from your own knowlwdge or experience.