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The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008
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The given bat charks below indicate, the population of
students
 who are studying for bachelor's and masters and starting an occupation but not full-time in their free time which they are not in college in 2008. The first chart which is shown the number of graduate collegian par what they do , it is obvious ,
Further
 study dedicated a massive number which
its
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 nearly 30.000 population.
then
 with a considerable
the
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difference
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 it can be seen
part-time
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work
that
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is about 18.000
students
. unemployment has taken
the
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third
 place with a shade of part-time
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approximately 16.000 people, and the lowest mounts it's for voluntary
work
 with a number of 3,500. in the
second
 paragraph, it can be seen that
further
 study and part-time
work
 are more popular and respectively 2,725 and 2,535
students
 are working there.
Then
 there is unemployment and voluntary
work
 which is more or less 2,000 in total. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that the bars in comparison to the above chart are
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the same older the student population has an enormous downfall which means postgraduate
students
 are less inclined to
work
 part-time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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