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The bar chart compares the amount of
time
 each day that people from four different countries spent doing activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. The activities were going to the beach, visiting different attractions, and reading. Overall, the
tourists
 spent the most
time
 reading
books
 while they spent the least
time
 visiting places. The Chinese
tourists
 spent the longest reading
books
 with a total of eight
hours
 per day.
By contrast
, the Brazilians spent the longest at the beach with a total of six
hours
. Both the American and the
Turkish
tourists
 spent the same number of
hours
 every day visiting places with a total of three
hours
 each.
Similarly
, the
Turkish
 and Brazilian groups spent a total of four
hours
 each reading
books
. The Chinese
tourists
 spent twice the amount of
time
 reading
books
 as the
Turkish
 and Brazilian
tourists
, whereas the American and
Turkish
 groups spent three times the amount of
time
 visiting places as the Chinese group.
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