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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group that they belong to than any other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in
this
 modernised world, most people are concerned about shopping. There are some individuals, who assume that buying habits are related to a personage. To my point of view, I strongly agree with
this
 notion because of some evidence.
To begin
 with, the shopping nature of elders and younger are different like the children prefer
the
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bright colours but the adults take care
about
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 fashion. To exemplify, the research conducted by the school in Britain, stated that when a person gets older, he likes simplicity because our mental power gets disturbed in old age without comforts. As a,result the buying hobby is dependent on the age group.
On the other hand
, In adult
life
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 we feel healthy and fit and
also
 we want to attract others
that is
 why we sometimes bear pain in order to express ourselves in a beautiful way.
Apart from
this
, at the age of 60,s and 70,
s
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the
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people are mostly surrounded by some diseases because their bodies feel tired all the time.
For instance
, In Japan their shopping stores for all ages are different especially for elders, from their point of view, they assume that simple things attract
the
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old ages. Because of
this
, they advertise only simple products in
that
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 stores. Taking everything into consideration, I believe that the person,
s
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's
 shopping preference is more dependent on
life
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the life
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 group than any other factors because our mental growth likes
the
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simplicity in the old
ages
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age
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 and
also
, in the adult group we care about
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 culture because in that maturity we feel strong.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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