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Some people think sports are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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A question central to today's
sports
 debates is whether
sports
 are beneficial only for society and
people
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 or individuals should be
considred
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considered
 as a pastime. in
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 I will explain both sides in the forthcoming paragraphs. some think doing
sports
 have many benefits for us because
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 various sort of
the
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sports
 help to stay healthy and in the shape. Many
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diseases could be prevented with regular exercise.
This
 does not only have advantages for individuals but benefits our generation too. Most
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the
people
 who are attending
sports
 constantly are healthier than
others
.
For instance
, playing tennis increase the player's health conditions by lessening the blood pressure.
Thus
, These players experience fewer heart diseases.
Also
,
sports
 could lessen the crime rate considerably. When individuals spend their time with useful activities they will sound
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 less negative
people
 and they will commit fewer crimes.
Thus
, the crime rate will decrease and
sports
 would benefit society. on the flip side,
others
 think doing
sports
 should not be mandatory and should be considered
as
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a leisure activity. Most play
sports
 because they are enjoyable and are the best way of
past time
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pastime
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.
Sports
 not only could benefit our health but they can help
people
 to have a better mood and be happier in the long run. Take off-roading as an example,
people
 doing
this
sport
 as a favourite
pastimetime
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pastime time
 at the weekends. All in all,
Sport
 could benefit us in many ways it could be considered as a
pasttime
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pastime
 or as an intensive
sport
. Some prefer to consider
sport
 as a leisure time and
others
 tend to attend as a useful activity which has advantages for themselves and
others
.
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