The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.
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The charts give
the
information about what Correct article usage
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did
UK graduate and postgraduate Unnecessary verb
apply
students
do after finishing college if they didn't get the
full-time job in 2008.
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Overall
, we can said
that, by looking at the charts given, most of Change the verb form
say
the
both Remove the article
apply
students
did further
study when they Add an article
a further
leaved
school and the same Correct your spelling
leave
propotions
of both Correct your spelling
proportions
proportion
students
worked in
Change preposition
apply
voluntary
the least and the Change the word
voluntarily
umemployment
rate of Correct your spelling
unemployment
students
are also
the same for both sides.
Firstly
, the first chart shows that 29665 of the students
studied further
when they graduated and it is the most common thing. Also
, the second
leading thing which they did was part-time works
with Fix the agreement mistake
work
the
number of 17735 Correct article usage
a
students
. Moreover
, 16235 of them didn't get any job and only 3500 students
were in voluntary jobs.
Turning to the second
chart of postgraduate students
, we can see that the same patten
has Correct your spelling
pattern
also
applied to this
chart. To be precise, most of the students
, exactly 2725, studied more when they finished postgraduate
. The number of people who got in part-time jobs Correct pronoun usage
their postgraduate
also
followed Add a missing verb
was also
with
2535 Change preposition
by
students
and 1625 people got umemployment
despite they finished postgraduates. The same thing Correct your spelling
unemployment
employment
also
happened in postgraduate students
in voluntary works
as there were only 345 Fix the agreement mistake
work
students
in this
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