Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

some
opinion
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believe cell
phones
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calls should be
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restricted
and not used in public places, others
however
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, think talking in public places
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not have
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any thing
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bad just benefits. on the one hand, speaking with mobile
phones
in public places may
cause
other
people
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their
consentration
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concentration
.
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omportant
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important
in
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an area
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area
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like libraries as
people
need a calm place to study. Other
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that,
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think
talk
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loudly
through the phone may
cause
uncomfortness
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uncomforted
for other individuals. some
people
used to yell behind the phone
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which
may
cause
a bad mood for other individuals.
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, many
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people
are from
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they talk very
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loudly
so they always could
cause
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mood for others. on the flip side, for some
users
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it is necessary to answer their calls or call. Some
people
like
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businessman
businessman's
businessmans
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should answer
to
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their calls in
evey
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every
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situation
and location.
this
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band
may
cause
them some
unfourable
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unfavourable
unfordable
results.
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, older
people
should use
thier
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their
phones
and communicate because they may need
emmeidate
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immediate
medical care and the only way is to call them
woth
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with
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phone
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.
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of
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people
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who need medical care should talk with their
phones
everyday
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and in every
location
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this
bann may cost them their life All in all, there is debate about whatever using
phones
or not and there is two different
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of thinking which I explained in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Public transport
  • Necessity
  • Convenience
  • Emergencies
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  • Compromise
  • Context
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