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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand it also isolate us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements

#internet #matter #hand #people #socialise #statements
Internet helps us to easy communication with relatives and friends who lives abroad.
In contrast
, it discourages
people
 from interacting since they will be glued
on
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 their phones and laptops. Nowadays business
entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 use social media platforms to market their products and get customers. On top of that, it saves time, it is cheaper and very convenient.
In addition
, they will get to know, what will be trending at the present moment and order online.
Moreover
, it is very easy to work online
especially
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to
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for
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 nurturing mothers since they won't be any need for them to go to the office and rush back home to care for their babies.
Furthermore
,
people
 get job vacancies online
for example
 currently
UK
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 is looking for nurse aides to work in the Uk and
people
 from African countries have
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a preference
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preference
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 to work overseas.
On the other hand
,
people
 from remote areas will
left
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 behind
as a result
 of not having access to
internet
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the internet
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. Not only that,
social
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the social
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 network is a bad influence
to
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 teenagers considering that they will have
connection
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 to pornographic, drugs and dating sites.
People
 become too relaxed to visit each other since they will be communicating on WhatsApp, Facebook, Instagram and Twitter just to mention a few. We tend to use social media in times of desperation and
people
 take advantage of that to fraud others
for example
 you will be in need of employment and someone will offer you the job and request you to send some more for the process.
Furthermore
, most marriages have failed due to social networking. In conclusion, I totally agree with the use of the internet because it makes our
day today
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 living easier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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