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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the results of a survey about
people
 who live in five different Australian
cities
 in order to know
thier
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their
 habits in buying and drinking
coffee
 and tea in the
last
 month. Overall, in all the
cities
 except for Adelaide, more
people
 visited cafes for some
coffe
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coffee
 or tea than bought instant or fresh
coffee
. In
Adeliade
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Adelaide
, going to a cafe and buying instant
coffee
 were almost equally common. Most residents in Sydney,
Melborune
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Melbourne
, Brisbane and Hobart visited a cafe for hot
drinking
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such
 as
coffee
 or tea, at approximately 61%, 63%, 55%,
63
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and 63
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% respectively, whereas just under half of
people
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the people
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 in Adelaide did so. These five
cities
also
 had roughly half of
residents
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the residents
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 purchasing instant
coffee
, and the figures in Brisbane and Hobart were almost 55
percent
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per cent
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. In comparison, the proportion of
people
 who bought fresh
coffee
 was never high as 45
percent
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per cent
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 in any of the five
cities
, with those in Brisbane and Adelaide, both
at
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apply
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nearly 35% less likely than those in the other three
cities
 to do so.
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