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4. Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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A lot of nations' aim is able to tackle the environmental issues,
however
,
this
matter
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 point has not
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. In my personal opinion, there are a lot of remarkable aspects in order that leadership should
to
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pay attention. In effect, if the national authorities yearn for solving
this
 trouble, they need to do many steps in order to address it. On the one hand, enhancing people's awareness is fundamental
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 that do not underestimate.
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, I assume that the government is able to consider using high-tech gadgets in
greenpeace
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 on the grounds that effective solution as well as saving
labor
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cost
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. In conclusion, I would argue that
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 ecosystem troubles is not only
national
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 authorities' mission but
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the citizen's
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citizen's
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 responsibility.
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 that,
this
 matter
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 several effective solutions as well as particular plans.
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