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Some people believe that reading stories from my book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that reading
stories
 from my book is better than watching
TV
 or playing
computer
games
for
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children
. In my opinion, I totally agree with reading
stories
 from my book is better than others.
Accordingly
, I will explain my reason in the following paragraph. On the one hand, Reading
stories
 from
books
 is better for vision health than watching television or playing
computer
games
. Nowadays, Publishers are popular using a green read paper.
Moreover
, Reading
stories
 from
books
 make
children
 more creative than others because
stories
 can make
children
 easier to imagine
stories
 from
books
. Whatmore, Parents can control appropriate
books
 for
children
 easier than
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children
 watching
TV
 alone.
On the other hand
, many
children
 have eyesight problems due to over watching television or addicting
computer
games
.
Moreover
, watching
TV
 or playing
computer
games
 alone make some
children
 discover an unsuitable thing
such
 as pornography or using weapons picture which affects the mental mind.
In addition
, If parents do not control them,
Children
 will be aggressive and
maybe
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may be
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 severely dangerous to a community
such
 as a secondary school student using a gun to invade and massacre
children
 in a primary school in Texas that appeared in the news
last
 week.
Consequently
, I agree with reading
stories
 from my book is better than watching
TV
 or playing
computer
games
for
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with
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children
.
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