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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Few individuals prefer to do different kinds of
activities
 in their
life
, while others do repeated
things
 to avoid the changes. Both the sides have some positive and negative
things
 and
this
 essay is going to discuss
pros
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 and cons of both views as well as give my own option at the end. On the
first
 hand, everyone is free to choose their lifestyle as per their own choice.
Hence
 few
people
 prefer to do their
activities
 in a regular way without disturbing them by following the same pattern. While doing
such
kind
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kinds
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 of repeated
activities
 they might get bored in their
life
 after some time.
Also
, It has some positive
things
, as they will never get disappointed in their
life
,
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 because they do not try anything new in their
life
.
On the other hand
, few
people
 try new
things
 in their everyday
life
 to make their
life
 more fun and thrilling.
For instance
, some
people
 try adventure sports and thrilling
activities
 to have some enjoyment. Those
activities
 will make them feel happy as well as excite them. But
also
 expose their
life
 to danger many times. But
such
things
 are more important for your
life
 to get some sweet memories to recall during our old ages.
Finally
, in my opinion,
people
 must try new
things
 in their
life
 because it will be more useful for them to recall those memories in their old ages
also
 they must pay more attention to those new
things
 must not affect their
life
 negatively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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