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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Certain individuals prefer to go about their lives in the same manner as they have previously done, whereas others strive to keep an open mind and maintain a positive outlook
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 when it comes to
change
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 risks to one are minimized when continuing to live in the comfort zone, rewards can only be maximized when there is low
reluctancy
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accepting
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change
. A person who constantly avoids
change
 may be classified as someone with a fixed mindset. These individuals are usually afraid of trying new things, due to a substantial fear of the potential risks involved.
Such
 people prefer the safety that comes from remaining in their comfort zone over the possible benefits that could
otherwise
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 wasn't viewed so negatively.
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, their
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 can be understood to a certain extent as
change
 may yield
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 results at times.
For example
, world development has had some detrimental consequences
such
 as the drastic increase in crime rates and the rising threat of environmental externalities produced by
change
. Yet, the drawbacks and opportunity cost of regularly resisting
change
, especially when it could be highly advantageous
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 the initial discomfort and hardships experienced. Without
change
, our society would not have evolved to become what it is today. Technology and science would most definitely not be as advanced as it is currently
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 if people weren't willing to accept the changes made to their way of living, by the modern revolution. From a
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, certain people wouldn't have been able to become prominent scientists or CEOs if they were afraid of taking risks and trying new things. Though
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 may not always produce the desired outcomes, it's necessary to ensure the continual development of both individuals and society as a whole.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • routine
  • comfort
  • familiarity
  • fear
  • unknown
  • resistance
  • negative consequences
  • security
  • adaptability
  • growth
  • development
  • excitement
  • experiences
  • personal
  • professional
  • resilience
  • positive outcomes
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