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Global environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations. Do you agree with this opinion?

#responsibility #nations
I think the problem of the world environment is all responsibility. Because everyone has different nationalities, but all
countries
 coexist on Earth. Since all
countries
 coexist on Earth, I don't think poor
countries
 should be less responsible and more responsible
as
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 rich
countries
. And because the standards of rich and poor
countries
 are
also
 uncertain, they cannot be held accountable differently depending on the poor and rich
countries
.
Therefore
, all
countries
 should be equally responsible for environmental
problems
. If one
country
 does not care about the global environment, the other
countries
 will not care about the global environment. Since each
country
 has a different main culprit of environmental pollution, each
country
 must
also
 have different environmental pollution measures. There will
also
 be cases where a lot of garbage gathers and leads to environmental
problems
 because some
countries
 have many factories and long factory operating hours, so many pollutants come out and other
countries
 do not recycle well.
Therefore
, some
countries
 think that turning factory-operated energy into eco-friendly energy, reducing factory operating time, and reducing the use of plastic and disposable products that are difficult to recycle are ways to solve environmental
problems
. There may be differences in the methods of each
country
, If every
country
 cares about its environmental
problems
 and tries to solve them, I think it will be a way to solve the global environmental
problems
 everywhere.
Therefore
, if each
country
 solves its environmental
problems
 little by little, I think it will be a way to solve the global environmental
problems
 everywhere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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