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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations #viewpoints
The graphs illustrate the
road
 access to a hospital in a town in 2007 and 2010 Overall, the
road
 facilities changed noticeably, while the location of the hospital remained unchanged. In the plan of the
city
 in 2007, the medical centre rounded by Ring
Road
 is located on the top of the map.
Then
 there is a Hospital
Road
 going to the south which has three bus stops from each side.
This
road
 is crossed by
City
road
 at the bottom of the illustration. The car park for staff and the public is situated along Hospital
Road
( on the east) between
City
Road
 and the hospital. In 2010 the crossroads of Hospital
Road
 with Ring
road
 on the north and with
City
Road
 on the south were replaced by roundabouts. The previous car park for everyone turned out to be for staff only. It was decided to build even bigger parking for the public opposite the hospital on the east side. All the bus stops were removed and were replaced by one huge bus station on the west side of Hospital
Road
.
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