Some people believe that reading stories from my book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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In our modern society,

children

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spend time with various things every day.

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, it is quite easy to see

children

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enjoying reading

books

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wathicng

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watching

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and playing

games

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in their house. In

this

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situation, certain people consider that reading stories from

books

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is better than enjoying watching

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or playing computer

games

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for

children

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However

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apply

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is disagreed

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this

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with this

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opinion

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with by

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some research results.

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with , many

children

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are getting tired of reading

books

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since they have to read a large

amount

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number

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of textbooks in their school.

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children

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spend 3 hours on reading materials during taking classes in their school,

moreover

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2 hours in their house after finishing classes due to doing a large

amount

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number

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homeworks

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homework

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children

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feel

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bored

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board

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bored

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when they read

books

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which

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leads to the situation that they do not want to read

books

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anymore.

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this

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makes clear that

children

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do not have a good motivation for reading

books

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Additionally

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children

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can absorb new knowledge by playing computer

games

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and watching

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. According to a

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survey

conducted by

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the Japanese

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government

reaveled

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revealed

that it is possible for

children

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to study effectively with

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apply

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good motivation

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from

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games

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and

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to that, another research in 2020 illustrated that

children

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who play

games

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and watch

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often got a 30 per cent

higer

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higher

score than

chidlren

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children

who do not.

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, it becomes apparent that enjoying

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and computer

games

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have

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has

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influence

influenced

inluence

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an inluence

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children

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in a better way. In summary, nowadays

younger

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the younger

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generation

are

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getting tired of reading

books

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futhermore

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furthermore

, they can absorb new information more through enjoying

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and

games

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. Reading

books

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is a traditional learning form,

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however

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the idea that reading

books

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are

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better for

children

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can not be supported after all since

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and

games

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have

better

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a better

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influence

for

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children

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. After

thorough

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analysis of

this

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subject, it is predicted that educational

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programs and

games

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will be developed more frequently for

children

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In the future.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

328 words

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