you have read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. -correct the information in the article -explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct the information - suggest what the magazine should do about this stituation

Dear Sit/Madam, I am one of your
subscriber
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and a big fan of your travel magazine. I always read your
article
’s about places in my free time. Yesterday, I was reading
a
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latest edition, I came across one
article
which is about my home town Rajkot. It is
very
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good
article
and
cover
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all the attractions of my town, perhaps there is a small mistake in it, about Gandhiji’s
school
. In the
article
, there is
section
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about Alfred heigh
school
, it says
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was demolished. but it is not true.
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is still there, it just convert into
Gandhiji
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a Gandhiji
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museum
. Gandhiji plays
very
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important role in our freedom fight. If information about
school
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is not corrected,
tourist
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tourists
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might miss the opportunity to visit the Gandhi
museum
. I would like to give
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that you can print
separate
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a separate
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article
about
Gandhi
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the Gandhi
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museum
in your
next
edition. and If you need any more information about my town or
Gandhi
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the Gandhi
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museum
. Please let me know I will more than happy to help you. I hope you will find
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information useful and consider my suggestion. Yours truly, xxx xxx
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