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it is shown the percentage of people over 18 years old who is following a vegetarian diet from 1960 to 2020.

#percentage #people #years #diet
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 it is shown the percentage of people over 18 years old who
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 following a vegetarian diet from 1960 to 2020. According to the
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, we can see
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 from the year1960 the percentage of people who decided to avoid eating meat was rapidly growing and in
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1980 equals approximately 16% It was the highest growth between 1960 and 2020 years.
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fallowing
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 a vegetarian diet started to
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 the 1990s. In spite of the fact, that in the early of 1990s was a little growth, it the line dropped again and equals less
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 5% in 1997. The situation changed at the beginning of the new century and from
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 time the line was sustainably growing for 10 years while
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 the beginning of 2010s the graph dipped a little and by in
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 10%. To sum up, it is worth to be mentioned, that the vegetarian diet is not really popular in the UK, the peak of its popularity was
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1980,
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, in the 21 century began to rise again and by the year 2020 reached a plateau.
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