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Some people believe that childhood is the best stage while others believe that a person can enjoy more happiness in other stages of life. Discuss both of views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 find that they were very happy as teenagers,
other
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others
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 find that
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adulthood
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adult hood
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adulthood
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 was more enjoyable than
there
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their
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 childhood years.In my opinion,I agree with
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 point because the happiest periods of
life
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 can vary from person to person. To
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 with, the
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 point is,
every
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that every
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 stage of
life
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 has its joys and sorrows. Many
people
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 remember their Teenage
year
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years
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 with the greatest importance. There are several
reason
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 for
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. Most
people
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 would enjoy a greater sense of freedom during their college or high school days. Since In those years friendship and brotherhood were in the prime of
life
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 and many experienced joyful
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moments
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.
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, college fresher parties and sporting events were great ways to get together and have fun.
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, during
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childhood,most children were active minding.So,all day they had playing games like cricket.Which,
their
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 was increase the sports skills.It will be helpful in future.
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,they
have
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not
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no
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 a tension
their
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life
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 as well as that age,they do not have any type of burden.
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, adult
life
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 offers several, positive
vand
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and
 bad
moment
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moments
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.Most adults fondly remember their happy moments.
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,
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 their
first
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 home or job,the celebration day or birthday and so on.
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,with age
people
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also
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 develop and evolve qualities
such
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 as maturity and understanding.These factors can bring a sense of satisfaction and stability,which in turn contributes to long term happiness in many
people
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's lives.
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,the mature person has a lot of stress in
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so
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they so
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,they
not has
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does not have
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 easily
live
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lived
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. In conclusion, adult and
teenagers
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teenager
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life
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 has
its
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their
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 fair share of ups and downs.While the lack of responsibility makes
life
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 entertaining in early
life
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.It is the
fulfillment
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 of one's
drems
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dreams
.
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,
i
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I
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 believe that everyone can be satisfied without being dependent on other ages.
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