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the median earning of men and women according to their educational qualifications, in North Carolina in 2017.

#men #women #qualifications #carolina
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The given bar graph illustrates the median
earnings
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 based on their educational
qualifications
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 in the year 2017 in North Carolina. It can be evident from the bar graph that
men
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 earn significantly more than
women
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 with all
qualifications
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 and
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 we can see that the
earnings
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 of
men
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women
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 gradually increased with their
qualifications
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 as Graduate Degree has more
earnings
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 when compared to other
qualifications
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. Noticeably the highest
earnings
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 of
men
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 were $80,000 whereas the
women
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 are nearly about $50,000 with Bachelors degree.
Men
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women
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 lower
earnings
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 with less than high school education which
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 $15,000 and $21,000 respectively.
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,
men
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women
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 earned $21,000 and $31,000 with an educational qualification of High school.
Men
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 with an Associate degree
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 an income of around $40,000
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women
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 earned nearly
about
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$38,000.
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