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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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Social
media
 has made a big impact on our lifestyles, the way we think and the way we react to different things. Even in remote areas, people have now easy access to social
media
 due to faster internet services and cheaper smartphones. There are many pros and cons of social
media
 usage.
Firstly
, we will discuss the cons. These days we are seeing many online scams. Identity theft has now become easier because all of your personal details are now available easily online. People are being catfished and honey-trapped easily.
Moreover
, we have witnessed in past a major scandal in the famous social
media
 company 'Facebook'. The Facebook owner was found guilty of selling all of its website user's personal
information
 without their consent to different companies.
In addition
 to
this
, the easy availability of adult content on social
media
 is very alarming. It is corrupting our younger generation's minds.
Conversely
, it has many advantages
also
. The major advantage is that it has destroyed the monopoly of print and broadcast
media
 on the
information
. Now, you don't have to rely on these traditional
media
 for
information
. You can search for anything on Google and Youtube. In the older days, every household used to keep a recipe book. Youtube has changed it. You can find any type of recipe now on Youtube, whether it be Indian or Italian. In conclusion, I will say that the benefits of social
media
 outweigh the disadvantages as it has empowered the common man by providing him access to every
information
 available to mankind. Social
media
 has pulled people out of their ignorance and has made them more woke.
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