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Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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A significant number of people discuss the probability of affection to watching offensive content.
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, increasing crime and murder. My side is
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, I will try to be impartial in explaining both opinions in
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 essay. Many researchers have approved that people’s
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 are influenced easily and
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, several physiatrists advise stopping watching cruel news’ broadcasting
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 they encourage checking out cheerful events. They specified whom with fragile mental health. In that, I found the explanation for the aggressive pattern of my male siblings’ actions after finishing wrestling games.
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, normalization of hitting and hurting each other lately. As a consequence of, seeing action movies and TV series consistently.
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, Human beings are mindful enough to take control of themselves. So it is ridiculous to believe that intimation and improvisation can affect them immensely. Especially, with these imposed rules and laws which we have currently.
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, the cinema producers often label
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 off-camera scenes are considered proof of the unreality of any violence.
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, the level of offensiveness will be effective less on young people. To calculate, both sides have their convincing points of view, but I believe that our personalities are sensitive to the extent
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