A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.

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It’s been so long

that

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since

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we’ve

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met

from

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the

last

summer. I’m happy to hear that you’re planning to go

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camping holiday for the

first

time and I’m very welcome that you ask for my advice. A camping holiday is a good idea and I

confident

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that you will get many good experiences from

this

trip. I would recommend you to find

some place

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near the mountain and close to the river

that

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where

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you can enjoy watching the animals going out at night. Even if it would be

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enjoyable trip, it has

some

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something

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thing

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that you should take

awareness

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restrict

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area

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that you must not

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enter because it’s wild

animals

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areas. I would suggest you

asking

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some officer to make sure where is the safe area for you. I would love to join and spend time with you for the trip

this

summer. It would be a good time for us to do something together.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

162 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
cost-effective
unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
campsite
lasting memories
mutual interests

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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.

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Some people are of the opinion that the best gift to give teenagers is Money, others think otherwise. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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