A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.

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the
last
summer. I’m happy to hear that you’re planning to go
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camping holiday for the
first
time and I’m very welcome that you ask for my advice. A camping holiday is a good idea and I
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that you will get many good experiences from
this
trip. I would recommend you to find
some place
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near the mountain and close to the river
that
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you can enjoy watching the animals going out at night. Even if it would be
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enjoyable trip, it has
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that you should take
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.
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area
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that you must not
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enter because it’s wild
animals
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areas. I would suggest you
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some officer to make sure where is the safe area for you. I would love to join and spend time with you for the trip
this
summer. It would be a good time for us to do something together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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