In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

It has been observed that the population is exponentially growing in many urban pockets of the world. To mitigate
this
issue,
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Government officials are asking the dwellers as well as the companies to shift
in
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the countryside.
However
, from my perspective, the demerits may overpower the merits in
such
a scenario. In the upcoming paragraphs, I would like to shed some light on the same. On the one hand, a
city
bolsters developed transportation facilities that
makes
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commuting
hassle free
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for the working and non-working class.
Moreover
, the authorities spend
huge
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amount of the budget to build urban
infracstrutres
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infrastructures
such
as roads,
flyover
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and highways. Major airports and railway stations are strategically placed for the business
personels
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personnel
to work efficiently by travelling day in and day out.
On the other hand
, in villages, travelling for work may take
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duration and people may keep coming back to
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to fly domestically or internationally.
Consequently
,
this
will waste man working hours.
Furthermore
, the natural beauty and fresh breeze of villages will be
explioted
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exploited
with the organisations moving there. Construction work will abundantly increase, which may spoil the
scerene
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scene
screen
serene
environemnt
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environment
.
Moreover
, space will be required to build new offices, buildings and many more, which may lead to deforestation.
Besides
this
, modern facilities are at disposal for the urbanities, so
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crowd will slowly replicate these
amenitites
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amenities
in the rural
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.
Thus
, we may fail to
preseve
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preserve
the
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rural life. To summarise, though the Government has been suggesting companies and residents
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shift their base, it is not a pragmatic option because
road
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, rail and flying connectivity
is
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much stronger in the
city
area.
Also
, a paradigm shift will be seen in rural life as urban people may start developing the countryside and
consequently
spoil
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nature.
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