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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays,
people
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travel
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 in different directions they like to
travel
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 easily and
confurntable
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comfortable
confrontable
.Some
people
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 think that
improvi
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improve
improving
 public
transport
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 facility and
other
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others
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belive
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believe
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 that construction new railway lines in cities.
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This
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 essay both sides I will discuss
in
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further
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 paragraphs.
Body · 1
On the one hand,
peopl
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people
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that construction
new
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of new
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 railway lines from city area
becouse
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because
 it's
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 for local
people
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.
Firstly
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,
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train
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trains
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 are inexpensive
ticket
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tickets
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 and
it
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they
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travel
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 fast as compared to
car
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cars
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 normal
individual
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individuals
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travel
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in
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on
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train
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trains
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.
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, car and public
transport
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 create
environment
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 pollution and it
people
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 face traffic conjunction problem and spend more time
to
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travelling
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travel
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.
Thirdly
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, nowadays
train
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speed
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speeds
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 are much faster as
compare
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compared
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 to public
transport
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.
For example
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,
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survey
surveys
survay
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a survay
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 conducted by
BBC
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 news
chanel
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channel
Chanel
it's show
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it shows
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 many
people
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 chose a
train
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 to
travel
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 as
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compared
compare
campare
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 to public
transport
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 port.
Body · 2
On the other, some
people
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are
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apply
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come from rural areas to urban areas to find job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and education skills and they
travel
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in
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by
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 public
transport
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. They spend
lot
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a lot
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 of while
traveling
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travelling
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 and
it
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they
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 face traffic problems.
Moreove
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Moreover
, government spend money on public
transport
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 and
solve
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solves
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 the issue. Public
transport
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are
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is
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 much
expensive
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more expensive
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 as
compare
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compared
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 to
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train
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trains
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 and it
create
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creates
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lot
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a lot
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 of pollution and
increase
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increases
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 global warming.
Conclusion
In my opinion,they spend money on
train
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 construction
line
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lines
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 and public
transport
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 because
it
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they
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 both play important role in
people
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traveling
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travelling
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.

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