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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
travel
 in different directions they like to
travel
 easily and
confurntable
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comfortable
confrontable
.Some
people
 think that
improvi
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improve
improving
 public
transport
 facility and
other
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others
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belive
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believe
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 that construction new railway lines in cities.
This
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 essay both sides I will discuss
in
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further
 paragraphs. On the one hand,
peopl
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people
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that construction
new
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of new
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 railway lines from city area
becouse
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because
 it's
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 for local
people
.
Firstly
,
train
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trains
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 are inexpensive
ticket
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tickets
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 and
it
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they
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travel
 fast as compared to
car
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cars
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 normal
individual
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individuals
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travel
in
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on
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train
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trains
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.
Secondly
, car and public
transport
 create
environment
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environmental
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 pollution and it
people
 face traffic conjunction problem and spend more time
to
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travelling
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travel
.
Thirdly
, nowadays
train
speed
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speeds
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 are much faster as
compare
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compared
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 to public
transport
.
For example
,
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survey
surveys
survay
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a survay
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 conducted by
BBC
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the BBC
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 news
chanel
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channel
Chanel
it's show
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 many
people
 chose a
train
 to
travel
 as
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compared
compare
campare
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a campare
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 to public
transport
 port. On the other, some
people
are
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apply
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come from rural areas to urban areas to find job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and education skills and they
travel
in
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by
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 public
transport
. They spend
lot
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a lot
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 of while
traveling
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travelling
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 and
it
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they
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 face traffic problems.
Moreove
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Moreover
, government spend money on public
transport
 and
solve
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solves
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 the issue. Public
transport
are
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is
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 much
expensive
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more expensive
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 as
compare
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compared
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 to
train
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trains
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 and it
create
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creates
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lot
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a lot
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 of pollution and
increase
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increases
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 global warming. In my opinion,they spend money on
train
 construction
line
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lines
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 and public
transport
 because
it
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they
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 both play important role in
people
traveling
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travelling
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.
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