In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe hat money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

Overpopulaiton in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. what are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a new foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Reporting of crimes and other kinds of violent news on television and in newspapers can have adverse consquences. This kind of information should be restricted from being shown in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?