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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that
food
 substances containing added sugar ought to be exorbitant to inspire
citizen
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citizens
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 to reduce
its
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 intake. In my opinion, I agree that
food
 being high-priced to minimize the devouring is beneficial.
Firstly
, increasing the price of sweetened
products
 is justifiable as it causes several health issues.
This
 is because the
food
 items contain a large
amount
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 of calories with no
nutrient
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nutrients
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.
Also
, people do not have the feeling of fullness
compare
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 to when a healthy diet is consumed.
Consequently
, they crave
for
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more sweet things and other
food
products
 increasing their daily ingestion of
meal
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meals
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 which may result in obesity. To illustrate, in Nigeria, the most readily available sweetened drinks
such
 as Fanta
contains
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contain
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 11tablespoons of sugar, which exceeded the recommended daily
reauirement
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requirement
 of added sugar in
diet
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the diet
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. When an individual
take
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the
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apply
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sweet drinks
in addition
with
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to
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 other regular diets, it increases the risk of obesity. For
this
 reason, sweet things lower the quality of life of a person and affect the society's economy
on
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in
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 the long run.
Secondly
, it provokes the desire to be informed about the content of the
food
 substance.
In other words
, the expensive prices of the items would make
populace
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the populace
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 ponder
about
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thd
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the
 things they are about to purchase. It is in human nature to wish to have
an in-depth knowledge
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on
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of
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 what they are procuring with their
hard earned
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hard-earned
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 money.
Moreover
,
human
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humans
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 tend to weigh the benefit and the risk of the commodity and sometimes, seek
for
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products
 that are cheaper and healthier.
Thus
, assisting them
make
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a
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the
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 right choice in selection. Admittedly, it is true that people have the freedom of choice and should not be coerced to change their
habit
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habits
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. As some people ingest those
products
 when on a treat or after a hectic day to refresh themselves.
However
, there is a need to restrict the ingestion because it has a detrimental effect on
the
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apply
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health. In conclusion, limitation on sweetened items is a necessity for any individual that values improved
wellbeing
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well-being
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 and
have
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has
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 the readiness to change unhealthy practices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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