Some people think that excessive use of smartphones badly affects teenagers' literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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of the handset

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highly controversial during

this

contemporary era especially now

the

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technology is trending.Some

individual

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be of the opinion that

over utilization

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of phones incorrectly is detrimental to young

ones

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literacy

skills.I completely agree that they can be a dangerous distraction and affect

communication

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,the

iphone

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iPhone

are greatly know

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to cause a great deal

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distraction to the children as they are not well informed on what is appropriate to help them in academic.

In addition

this

technology

make

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youths have

a contradicting information

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on what they learn in schools

such

that their

literacy

competence is affected.

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,their

communication

which is imperative in learning

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skills is affected since they use incomplete words when texting.

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research done by the University of Nairobi depicts that

literacy

skills

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dropped by 50%

comparing

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with previous years.

Therefore

,youths should be controlled when using handsets as they contain offensive content

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the

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mobile phones are the most popular gadget in the world even albeit kids are

inadequetly

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inadequately

utilizing the phone,

communication

has been revolutionalized.

Moreover

,they can read and write

whereever

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wherever

they are

such

that there are applications that can award marks on what they have written and give them corrections as well as access journals to read.

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research done by the

kenyatta

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university indicates that 70% of youth

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improved on

literacy

due to the use of

this

technology.

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,teens can utilize phones for their own benefits as they can help improve

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their academic performance and socially. To sum up,

young

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a young

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person can be a drawback with

mobile

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the mobile

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phone

such

that if not utilized well can affect their future

communication

However

,there is an added advantage for those who utilize them.

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