Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children
are gifted with different talents and Gifts. And wholistic education is to help
children
realized
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realise
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and develop their talents.
As a result
, not every child will be good at learning academic
subjects
therefore
removing
non academic
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non-academic
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subjects
will not only be unfair but
also
discriminatory against
children
who for some reason believe that they don't possess the natural ability to excel at learning academic
subjects
.
Besides
, it is not only
children
who are good at academic
subjects
grow
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that grow
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up to be successful in life.
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