Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals think that unnecessary courses should be taken away from the syllabus so that students can focus only on
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with the given statement. To commence with ,
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plays a vital role in
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Life.
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days, students have more pressure on their minds
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learning
all the
subjects
whether it is mandatory or not.
Firstly
, pupils cannot fully concentrate on their important
subjects
like mathematics, social science , English and so on because of
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courses . They cannot leave them in exams as the percentage goes down from the overall final examination .
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, if
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subjects
can be removed from the
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performance
then
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children
performs
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better in their matriculation and gives excellent results .
In addition
, teachers gave them assignments and projects of
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courses while doing these things
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children
wasted a lot of time doing these useless things and that
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not
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. To sum up , I concluded that
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Children
can focus on their academic
subjects
rather than
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ones so that they can achieve good goals in their life and do more
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hard work
for taking
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percentage in the examinations.
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