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In some countries the government is encouraging businesses and industries to move outside the city centres and relocate to regional areas. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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It is now a common
phenomeno
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 world that the national authorities are motivating
companies
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 to relocate to rural
areas
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. I believe that the merits of having
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 a trend far supersede the negative outcomes. To start with, the establishment of
companies
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 creates jobs which reduces the number of criminal
activites
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activities
 because the least paid or general workers are usually from the nearest
surburbs
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suburbs
.
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, land
proces
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prices
 are cheaper and more available in rural
areas
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. Workers in regional
areas
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 can be hired for a lower
salry
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salary
 which is an
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advantage
 to the company, profits increase and the company
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will be
 able to open more branches.
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 more jobs are created. In
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addition
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, improved education is ensured so general workers will
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 their education levels to acquire high posts and better salaries. Raw materials are located in rural
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 it makes sense for
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companies
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 to be situated
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neared
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 to their required resources which
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 for lower transport
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 among other benefits.
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 there a few disadvantages in moving businesses to rural
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such
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 as
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connection
 may not be reliable and
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 is can adversely affect
companies
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 as
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 can disrupt production through loss of working
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. While the labour force is easily available but their
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test
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do
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leave a lot to be desired.As the company may have to spend more money
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 training expenses in order to upgrade
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 expertise. In
counclusion
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conclusion
, it is quite evident that a development
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 as the above would benefit a greater segment of the community thereby raising the general standards of living for society across the border.

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