In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?
Great
number of Change the article
A great
The great
people
try to work
harder than other people
. in this
essay
I will explain why Add a comma
,essay
people
work
harder and it is always good.
Some people
have big problems
in their life that they have to work
hard for solving these problems
such
as housing problem
and Fix the agreement mistake
problems
children
's school registration high fees. For instance
, all children
must I
study in Correct pronoun usage
apply
best
school and using the modern testing location these days parents should pay Add an article
the best
high
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a high
the high
cost
for their Fix the agreement mistake
costs
children
destination Change noun form
children's
one
if they cannot afford to pay, certainly the Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
cannot use of best education amenities. This
event will have Add an article
an affect
affect
on Replace the word
effect
children
's feel
. Replace the word
feelings
Secondly
, how surprise
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surprised
are
rising day by day so Change the verb form
is
people
have to work
harder until they can buy or rent good
house. Add an article
a good
the good
For example
, there are different opinion
between governments which are a fakely on price increase, houses and Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
people
need to work
hardwe
.
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hard we
Family
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The family
A family
person
will become hard Fix the agreement mistake
people
to
each other if they Change preposition
on
work
harder, they specifically don't have energy and time for their family. While they usually need to spend long
time together to receive Change the article
a long
positive
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a positive
feel
. Prince dance Replace the word
feeling
then
fathers are always tired and busy, they cannot make phone and fresh condition for their children
and wife. However
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it
can arise long stands between fathers and their Correct pronoun usage
apply
family
.
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families
conclusion
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,conclusion
people
cancel their life problems
with
working harder Change preposition
by
such
as housing problems
and paying school
registration. Working hard can create Change preposition
for school
big
distance between family members which are really bad effect on life quality and Correct article usage
a big
children
's growth.Submitted by aminfijaniielts on
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