In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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harder and it is always good. Some
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in their life that they have to
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hard for solving these
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school and using the modern testing location these days parents should pay
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if they cannot afford to pay, certainly the
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cannot use of best education amenities.
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rising day by day so
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have to
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harder until they can buy or rent
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house.
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between governments which are a fakely on price increase, houses and
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harder, they specifically don't have energy and time for their family. While they usually need to spend
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fathers are always tired and busy, they cannot make phone and fresh condition for their
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and wife.
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can arise long stands between fathers and their
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cancel their life
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working harder
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and paying
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registration. Working hard can create
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distance between family members which are really bad effect on life quality and
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's growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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