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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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It is argued that Huge Pay is more dominant than
Job
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 Contentment.I completely disagree with the statement as
Job
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Contenment
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Contentment
 is
Important
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more Important
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 than high wages.
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,
job
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 satisfaction gives people
happiness
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more happiness
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 than money.Even if someone is having high
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paycheck
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pay check
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paycheck
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 and is suffering from anxiety,Stress and nervousness they are not satisfied with their profession.While pursuing their own interests gives them satisfaction.
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,Tutors made their career choices not because of wages,
because
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but because
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 they were interested in teaching.
Secondly
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,
Job
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 Satisfaction helps people in their career growth.As they are interested in that profession they tend to
Develop
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develop
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 new skills and will be productive in their work.To exemplify,Dale Phillip resigned
his
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from his
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 daily occupation and decided to become a travel blogger.After many ups and downs in his career throughout the years now he is one of the
successful
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most successful
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 travel
blogger
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bloggers
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 in the world.
This
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 is one of the prime
reason
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reasons
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 for being successful in life. In conclusion,to live a happy and relaxed life
job
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 contentment is more important than money
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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