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It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films, and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Because of the innovation of technology and entertainment, some
people
 think that we can learn about other countries’ history or culture through the Internet and movies as same as travel.
Although
 we can earn much knowledge from paper and videos, I believe that we will gain much more interesting experiences during
travelling
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 to other places.
Firstly
, despite the technology improving very fast,
books
 and films are still not alive, and we cannot really interact with
people
 from other countries. Another concern is that these sources are made by
people
 so that they may have biases on some sensitive issues, especially on history. The internet
also
 has the same question because everyone has different opinions, and
people
 may hardly distinguish which is true. When
people
 travel to other places, they will interact with local residents, and visit museums or monuments to learn about local history and culture. When
people
 arrive at an unfamiliar place, they will more focus on the environment around them, so sometimes they may find interesting things that are not in
books
. After travelling,
people
 will have deep impressions because of their own experiences. During the trip,
people
 can compare differences between
books
 or films and local cultures, and they will not be misled by wrong information. In conclusion, I believe travel to other places can learn more than from
books
 and firms. When
people
 have direct experiences with something, the memories will be deeper than only watching videos or reading
books
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experiences
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehensive
  • historical context
  • facilitates
  • sensory and emotional depth
  • holistic understanding
  • cultural bias
  • stereotypes
  • discernment
  • virtual reality
  • convenience of access
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