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Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#countries #companies #offices #factories #businesses
It is argued that to protect local
businesses
 there should be some restrictions with the goal to avoid
that
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foreign companies can open offices and factories.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 phenomenon and it will explain why I disagree with
this
 opinion. It is true that in
this
 globalization era, the richest and biggest firms are obstacolating the trade of the local
businesses
. To exemplify, in my hometown tourists prefer to purchase items from famous shops rather than from local shops.
This
 happens because big firms pay more attention to advertising better their
products
 and, as a consequence, people choose to buy famous items.
However
, despite the higher number of items sold, it does not mean that
also
 the quality is higher. Actually, local
businesses
'
products
 have
a
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higher quality due to the narrow production.
Consequently
, I believe that it could be not fear to enforce restrictions on foreign companies but it could be better to improve the advertisement of local's
products
 trying to improve the local trade. Actually, many times local
businesses
 are not known by tourists and
this
 is the reason why they, in the end,
they
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do shopping through the big firms. To sum up, I disagree with the opinion that regards the introduction of some restrictions in order to protect local business.
Instead
, I am convinced that the best way to improve local trade is to promote better local
products
.
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