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Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.

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life
skills
 like cooking, housekeeping and Gardening are essential
life
skills
 to
everyone
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 of us
that
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apply
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whether or not we like it, we cannot run
Away
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 from it
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 outlines the reasons it is unnecessary for these to be included in the school curriculum though they are inevitable
life
skills
 for every human.
Firstly
, when
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anyone
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any one
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anyone
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suggest
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 that these
life
skills
 should be included in the school curriculum, he alludes to ways in which these
skills
 should be encouraged or promoted.
However
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 the
first
 question we need to answer in the quest to
inculcating
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 these
skills
 in children is how
common
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do
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apply
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peoples
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people
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 use these
skills
. Because there have been many instances where people pay for others to carry out
these duty
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.
Secondly
, people who have
the
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an
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 interest in these
skills
 learn and apply
without
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them without
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 it being compulsory or part of
school
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the school
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 curriculum.
Beside
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, the application of these
skills
 in most homes is not
depent
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dependent
depend
 on
skills
 but on whether the person
want
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wants
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 to apply these
skills
.
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